Pilot: The Awakening
By Christopher Baxter
EXT. A lonely barn
It is the lonely time between night and morning that is known as EARLY DAWN. We see a small barn on a field. Nothing moves.
We CLOSE IN SLOWLY ON THE BARN. It is eerily silent. Almost EERILY silent. It is DAWN.
INT. the lonely barn. A young girl is staring directly at the camera. The camera closes in towards her face. She speaks. Softly.
Did you hear something?
MAN'S VOICE OFF CAMERA
Nothing. Stop being such a damned-
His voice is abruptly cut off. The camera is still closing in on the girl's face, which does not change or show any flicker of emotion. After a second or two the girl reacts. She spins slowly and screams:
SHEEP (stepping into view)
Well well well. What do we have hear. *takes a puff of his pipe*
Phew! Old man furback, it's only you, I was worried that-
Shut your foul mouth, old devil woman! I am not here on good terms.
He stands up and takes a puff of his pipe.
You know why I'm here... I'm here... for payment. Payment in full.
Take off your clothes.
The Girl nods and stands to slide her dress down. Old man Furback glares at the MAN.
Both of you.
The man unbuttons his jeans reluctantly. With a grin, involuntary as his face has been scarred by ACID by the sheeps years ago.
This is as far as I have gotten, please review and let me know how to make it less hateful. Perhaps replace the crazed animals with something else, like mutated humans or evolved zombies?
You know what i'm gong to do? You deplorable goblins? I'm going to make this script the greatest script the world has ever read and then when I sell it and Spielberg directs it, and you're all sitting in the cinema MASTURBATING because the film's that good, you know what's going to appear at the end of the film? Not credits, just a black screen with white text scrolling up with the names of each and every poster on these forums, with FUCK YOU, PRICK written next to it. Then there will be a diagram of me molesting you in your sleep. What that would look like. I see it when I close my eyes.
You dirty little spits, you think you're so much better than me? I don't know how to format a script, sure, and yeah, I didn't know that faxes and phones are the same thing. But do you constructivelly help me? Do you aid me in my quest to be the best? No, you sit there and you just puke up your condescending little bastard words all over my monitor. Up yours, bloody-disgusting, you pack of hateful fucks. I hate you.
Originally Posted by Jigsaww
the series would be better with a remake the plot sucked i cant even remember why they wanted to kill sidney i used to love it cuzz of the costume but why? i like the series but i could have been better. but atleast its not one of those kind of movies where the person cant die but it was a person each time in the same costume....that sucked....i liked the costume but it could have been different like the bloody scream costume you see people wear during halloween time or a different weapon atleast. very different people wanting to kill the same people with the same weapon....whats up with that?
Bastard love child of Dr Cannibal and Slasher Freak 97.
And you can call your gang, your posse and the rest of your crew.
And while you're at it get them addicts and the indigent too.
I plan to have a whole army by the time that I'm through
to load their guns with songs they haven't sung
We've been here all fucking night you petty humans and still the mighty FURBACK is not tired. Not tired by far.
The WOMAN looks up at Furback.
Please... we've been doing it all night... are you not content with our displays?
They were ok I suppose... you make love well together like real humans... real dirty humans and Furback likes that.
If I had my way I'd rape both of you but, as you know, my penis is too big for that. I tried it... it split through their back and they died.